You can tell the way I use my walk

Ok, so here is the thing.  You can't write about a couple of teenagers in a California town pushing a trolley around a grocery store putting veg in it and making dinner on the cooker and then to top it off, mention in the same fic that someone ha £5 to spend.

Or rather, you can.  But I am not going to read it.  

Betas exist for a reason, and while I think the idea of your story could be intriguing, I keep getting thrown out of it every few paragraphs because you didn't use one.  So thanks, but no thanks.

Blargh.
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